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11:30 PM

by Joseff Marat

I have not dreamt in months

I stare up into the infinite night sky looking for answers
the cat cleans himself in the rocking chair by the window;
his abrasive tongue is a maddening echo through out the cavernous rooms of our house

I hear the murmur outside of the old man across the street
the ambience of another room in another house
in another country where it is day,
is coming through the waves of the HAM radio in his office

I have not dreamt in months

Even now as she sleeps I smile & reassure her that I love her
...Elizabeth talks in her sleep
and she mumbles that she has to get up early and that she is sorry...
as it slowly fades from her lips

I think of our child that she carries inside
and I remember our future

I have not dreamt in months.

... maybe there is no need to.

10/19/2006

Author's Note: This is ... biographical and extremely personal.

Posted on 10/19/2006
Copyright © 2024 Joseff Marat

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Jeffrey Parren on 10/19/06 at 06:14 PM

Incredible poem. Was not sure where you were going with it until the very end, the clincher as it were. You don't need to dream anymore, because you are living it...great great read. The form is scattered but adds to the meaning and still has a structure that is able to be followed. Great sound words, great images, easy to picture and even hear. Like the "remember our future." Very quaint and full of hope. +fav ~JPP

Posted by Vere Mantratriad on 10/19/06 at 10:09 PM

I love the repetition of "I have not dreamt in months." It's use is very effective especially as it brings the reader to the end. For some reason, I really like the line "and I remember our future"... it's completely improper because you can't remember something that hasn't happened yet...but I really like it and it really fits with the poem. It's not always easy to write something uplifting without it coming off as cheesy, but I think you've done an excellent job of avoiding that and have written a beautiful and meaningful poem.

Posted by Anne Boulender on 10/20/06 at 12:08 AM

interesting how this is autobiographical and extremely personal yet its not revealing and we learn nothing about you. this reminds me of adam duritiz of the counting crows.

Posted by James Cavet on 10/23/06 at 11:30 PM

Beautiful and strange; it would be interesting transferred to film. I can see it in my mind. What makes it even more so is the fact that it's real.

Posted by Mara Meade on 10/25/06 at 12:11 AM

The intimacy and transparency is... breath-taking. This is came from the soul. I can tell.

Posted by Kristine Briese on 01/03/12 at 11:35 PM

Beautiful - you make us feel the calm and the joy. Wonderful.

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