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Dislocation

by Arthur Parten

I have lain on my back
for ten minutes now watching
small wisps of clouds fly
quicker than they ought to.

According to stories I've heard
I should be throwing up now
since the pain is unbearable
by all accounts

but I don't hurt when I don't move
so I think I'll just sit still.
The grass is cool under my hot back.
I want to go to sleep out here.

09/27/2006

Posted on 09/28/2006
Copyright © 2025 Arthur Parten

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Timothy Burns on 09/17/09 at 08:25 PM

maybe leave out "under my hot back" and say under me. Awesome poem!

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