this is a really great form, the short lines followed by longer, cool rhythms. would be a great performance piece. each stanza could stand alone as its own poem. in terms of the flow/story from stanza to stanza, it goes very smoothly, until the last stanza, which i'm still trying to figure out. maybe the musical reference is a bit too obscure for me. perhaps with further contemplation, i'll figure it out...good fun to read again and again, appreciating all the nuances. PK