| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Jean Mollett on 06/23/06 at 01:53 AM Hi Vere,
Very good work. Love can be good. But some men can be a total jerk amd more. they take us for granted. |
| Posted by Jaydon Cole on 06/23/06 at 01:57 AM I really enjoyed this poem. The last two stanzas really hit hard, and made me go back over it several times. Thank you for sharing! |
| Posted by Christel Crews on 06/23/06 at 02:16 AM that 3rd stanza is a mistake so many make way too often.. and then you zing us at the end with the last bit.. very powerful, a great write! |
| Posted by Richard Vince on 06/27/06 at 10:38 PM mm. this one hits hard. i need to read more of your stuff if it's this good. |
| Posted by Junemarie Roldan on 06/30/06 at 05:34 AM Cuts a little too close for me. You really have the gift of self expression. Congrats! |
| Posted by Sandy M. Humphrey on 07/03/06 at 08:59 PM Once again you have captured and enticed with an opening title and then delivered what other poets wish they could. The reality of each stanza is one with wich many can identify, here you give us a glimpse of the writer yet it is the reader who ends up seeing oneself in your words. smh |
| Posted by Melanie J Yarbrough on 06/22/08 at 06:45 PM yes. this is wonderful |
| Posted by Genevieve Sturrock on 06/05/09 at 01:57 PM random favorite today...what a perfect metaphor. love this. |
| Posted by Maude Curtis on 06/26/09 at 04:32 PM Missed this the first time around. I really like this and the title is perfect. I've been there more than I can count. Right now all the broken crystals of my heart have settled, but eerirly I long for a good shake. |
| Posted by Michael Smith on 01/17/10 at 05:17 AM This was also rightfully on someone's favorites-list. The whole thing is extremely clever and it possesses a number of interesting dimensions, including the title. I like this style of yours because we fall... we fall into a pool of your pithiness. Awesome.
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| Posted by Jody Pratt on 12/06/10 at 03:12 AM I love the metaphor here. You delivered it very well. :) |
