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All the king's horses and all the king's men never cared
by Vere MantratriadFull title: All the king's horses and all the king's men never cared and so, never came
I watched them push you over the wall,
a line you weren't ready to cross.
my timing was poor and delayed -
so though I tried, I could not save you.
I saw you seep out of your shell,
a golden mess, scrambled before the fall;
a lifetime of emotion, sticky and loose,
running out on the pavement.
The ants, always waiting, went wild;
usually only applying the occasional sting,
saw their chance for a free meal and
now feasted on your vulnerability.
I attempted to urge them away from you,
their focus was on your breaking point;
they gathered their voices and taunted me,
called me a fool for believing in fragility.
I picked up the pieces to protect what was left,
and cursed all the horses and all the men.
though I can not help, I will wait for you
to put yourself back together again. 06/15/2005 Author's Note: repost from 06/15/2005
*sigh*
Posted on 05/24/2006
Copyright © 2025 Vere Mantratriad
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Christel Crews on 05/24/06 at 07:35 PM this broke tears to my eyes... i'm right there at this very moment in my life.. i can't save him, all i can do is wait and watch as he picks up the pieces of his life.. i love the metaphor.. its going on my favorites list :) |
| Posted by Julie Adams on 05/24/06 at 11:57 PM this is a great piece...extended metaphors are fun, and leave room to play poetically...well done, *jewels* |
| Posted by Junemarie Roldan on 07/15/06 at 09:41 AM I've been waiting forty seven years now, and I will continue to so, until my body lies rotting in the ground. I know not, what else to do. Bravo, your arrow pierced straight 'thru to the heart. No one can say that your aim isn't true. I'm tucking this away in my favs. |
| Posted by Genevieve Sturrock on 01/31/07 at 05:37 PM Okay, found this on someone else's favorite's list...now it's going into mine. I have said this to you time and time again...I am in absolute awe of your ability to express so much, with such perfection, with your words! |
| Posted by Quinn Vokes on 10/26/08 at 01:00 AM This is absolutely beautiful. You painted a picture with your words, I can clearly see. Lovely.
Qu |
| Posted by Amie Golda on 01/22/10 at 05:18 AM Though the theme of this poem is quite sad I will say this is a clever allusion to Humpty Dumpty. Way to go on turning a Nursery Rhyme into a poem. I certainly have no problem with borrowed literature and I admire even those who can spin stories out of stories. Great write for being able to do that. |
| Posted by Rebecca Lin on 01/22/10 at 01:29 PM This is absolutely beautiful. I love it! Congrats on POTD! |
| Posted by Michael Smith on 01/23/10 at 02:04 AM Congrats on POTD, Vere. 'Tis very much deserved. |
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