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Erasure

by Uriel Tovar

You hold force with
an open fist
flat palm
carving out ice
and sadness with a steady rush of
winterness.
i howl at your waves.

05/16/2006

Posted on 05/16/2006
Copyright © 2025 Uriel Tovar

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Michelle Angelini on 05/20/06 at 05:55 AM

I sense a firm tone here, indicating that no nonsense will be stood for. It's one personality against another. One suggestion, move "of" in line 5 down to the beginning of line 6.
~Chelle~

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