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heron
by Peter Humphreyswearily
waiting
watching
weir
water
whirling
winding
where
we
where
when
we
wondered
why
who
what
whether
windward
fish
darting
caught
eaten
wings
flapping
moment
gone
04/12/2006 Posted on 04/12/2006
Copyright © 2024 Peter Humphreys
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Gregory O'Neill on 04/12/06 at 05:40 PM Hi Peter. Without a mention of the great fisher-bird you build a vivid picture through these ideas. For me, the weir solidified what is happening, but that's just me. Thanks for this. |
| Posted by Jim Benz on 04/17/06 at 04:08 AM this was a really interesting poem. I was reading through the 'w' words thinking hmmm, then suddenly - action at the end, quick and over just like that. got to thinking you'd done all the 'w' words to set a moment of stillness, suddenly interupted with the gist of the whole thing dropping out of the sky. very ingenious is what I'm thinking. or maybe I'm way off track. just a thought - and the reason I enjoyed it so much. |
| Posted by Joan Serratelli on 04/17/06 at 03:56 PM Interesting and creative use of alliteration, while painting a very vivid image. Great write! |
| Posted by Elizabeth Jill on 04/19/06 at 05:29 AM This is so cool! |
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