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Object of Her Desire
by Soulo Jacob BourgeauObjectify me; placed
high on curio shelf
just out of reach from your
capricious heart shaped smudge
Safely behind lead glass
you may still take me down
for occasional Hallmark Days
and flanneled winter hugs
But please when youÂ’re done
(and youÂ’ve had all your fun)
return me back amongst
heirlooms and fragile things
Safe from appraisal
by fickle auctioneers
01/23/2006 Author's Note: Thanks, Christine. I've reworked the line breaks and remodeled the title (originally: "Objectify"). Your suggestions were invaluable as always. More revisions still possible. Everyone else: critique if so inclined.
Posted on 01/23/2006
Copyright © 2024 Soulo Jacob Bourgeau
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Elizabeth Jill on 01/28/06 at 05:20 AM indeed I feel the same...I love the way you found and placed the plea 'return me back amongst heirlooms and fragile things'. Showering work of heART, Soulo. * —Jill |
| Posted by Delilah Coyne on 04/10/06 at 11:21 AM Wow! POTD! Congratulations. I love the metaphor you've used here. It works really well for the point you are trying to make. Well executed and a great read!! |
| Posted by Michelle Angelini on 04/10/06 at 09:23 PM Just the way I feel and you put it so well... Congratulations on POTD!
~Chelle~ |
| Posted by Leslie Ann Eisenberg on 04/11/06 at 11:12 PM this makes me sad, i don't know why. i guess the perspective of the the "object" is not often considered. the image of a doll, along with "curio," being a plaything to another is demeaning and tragic, as so aptly drawn out in the unforgettable "capricious heart shaped smudge" other evocative lines that bring forth the emotional tug for me -- flanneled winter hugs.. and....fragile things...congratulations on POTD. PK |
| Posted by Alisa Js on 03/06/07 at 11:43 PM reading through this one, I come away with an entirely different take on what the 'object' of her affection is.. maybe I am roaming around in the xxx category... lol.. please accept my apologies... lol.. aloha.. |
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