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Con Usted
by Kim BennettVisiones de relámpago chocando detrás de ruinas extraordinario
Bailes de viejos resonando desesperadamente
Cantos de magia, canción de tiempo
Venas de el enterraba ciudad
Escaleras de un año, una vez que rojo.
Ciudad oliendo de flores,
Vientos de sal,
Cultura espesa.
Aprendiendo.
Cambiando.
Entendiendo.
¿Qué más pueden aprender?
¿Dónde irán?
Extraordinario
Inolvidable
Con Usted 12/14/2005
Author's Note: This is my only attempt at writing a poem in a different language. I'm not sure I got all of the structures right, I get confused when things go before something else like "ruinas extraordinario". And I'm not sure if "cantos" is the right word for chant. But I wrote this for my spanish teacher when I graduated because we had gone to Mexico together. So if anyone has any suggestions, by all means, tell me. :)
Posted on 12/15/2005
Copyright © 2024 Kim Bennett
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Steven Kenworthy on 12/16/05 at 12:07 AM there are a few small grammatical errors, but the imagery you captured is pretty strong considering it's your first foreign write. mexico is a very spiritual place and can take your breath away if you let it. try another...they'll only get better! :) |
| Posted by Jersey D Gibson on 12/16/05 at 06:17 AM "Cantos" I believe is "song", like it is in Latin, but it also means "chant" as well. But "With You" is a wonderful piece, and I think it being in spanish adds to it. +fav
yer pal
Jersey |
| Posted by D. Xavier Bari on 12/17/05 at 06:07 AM At least you gave it a shot. I'm almost tempted to try and dust off my old Spanish lessons to try and understand it (as opposed to the D- version I'm working with now). |
| Posted by Gregory O'Neill on 12/17/05 at 08:51 PM Detalles maravillosos de la visión del relámpago. Escritura de Niza. |
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