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don't comment on my wounds

by Ava Blu

your handwriting seems rehearsed;
line breaks off center and
the curvature looks forced

(why does it feel familiar?)

i didn’t reword to fit your page,
but i understand why you’d think that

i see adjectives attached to your windows,
pulling verbs as you sleep;

it's the only way to make the nouns fit

08/30/2005

Author's Note: unfinished.

Posted on 08/30/2005
Copyright © 2025 Ava Blu

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Frankie Sanchez on 08/31/05 at 05:32 AM

wow, this is powerful. the structure and word use work well together, nice work... very deep.

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