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asthma attack
by Ava Blu
instead of talking,
I wheeze the words
attack of the weak, yet
overrun with power
I am a southern, small town belle
with a big city heart;
I want bright lights and big dreams
squash that
I'll settle for the dark and just one dream
if if
if I am able to speak
gotta remember to brush my teeth
before you take my voice
I'll write write write
though my hands shake;
just think of it as a tornado form
when the lines break up words
be sure to have your magnifying glass
if you ever want to keep me.
08/28/2005 Author's Note: more irrelevant mess;
help with title?
Posted on 08/28/2005
Copyright © 2024 Ava Blu
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Jim Benz on 09/01/05 at 03:39 PM "I'll settle for the dark and just one dream" is a great line. The title's alright too, kind of ties things together. |
| Posted by Meghan Helmich on 07/09/08 at 12:46 PM because i have asthma, i know the panic of the feeling when you're having an attack. so, i expected a bit more of that material in the poem. but it was still good for what it's worth. nothing in a poem is ever irrelevant! |
| Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 04/21/09 at 03:31 AM I think your voice is just fine here. This is the kind of piece that begs to be part of the spoken word scene. I love it. |
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