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08/04

by Ava Blu


motion not with standing
because your stilts
could never reach that high.

08/04/2005

Author's Note: you can never be tall enough to ride this.

Posted on 08/04/2005
Copyright © 2024 Ava Blu

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Michelle Angelini on 08/04/05 at 10:08 PM

Jeanna, the implied ride in your haiku is aided by separating "with" and "standing," when they could be one word. This way, interpretation is open to the reader's imagination.
~Chelle~

Posted by Melanie J Yarbrough on 08/05/05 at 03:01 AM

yeah, I especially like the author's note- very diva..

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