free verse #1 - 7/22/'05 by Corey Lockabyi'm having trouble seeing
the real difference between
you (fly fly unending)
this (he never sang it in front of people)
like a rock
like something you cannot describe
but perhaps you've tried more often than you thought
(because there is nothing, no one) you see it
you can live without
you can live with this
you said it, not that plain
distance is all the better for things
but
that was never true
kinder? better than what?
there's no boundary, or limit
there's nothing my eyes
can't handle after a while
and you know i'm broken
in thoughts, in works
i can't help but see it all in pieces
like a grid, maybe,
or
a bar of chocolate, so you could see it better
not as a curse, maybe,
just a downfall an old charm a backburner deceit
take maybe, and toss it
keep yourself in it all
see it sit, trace, run down
and you say you don't remember
but memory requires no reason, you know
why that's what you wanted
more than half? half a minute
30
30 seconds
and i almost let you die 07/22/2005 Author's Note: Free Write. Friday morning, July 22, 2005
There's still more that I couldn't phrase properly. I might just write something else out of necessity.
Posted on 07/22/2005 Copyright © 2024 Corey Lockaby
Member Comments on this Poem |
Posted by Michelle Angelini on 08/06/05 at 08:26 PM Corey, freewrites don't need to be phrased properly, since stream-of-consciousness is confusing, because they involve conflict resolution. Even still, S 10 shows logic and some kind of order. Random thoughts & words are added throughout the poem that may or may not be relevant. By the last stanza, you (or the narrator) achieves realization, even if it's not the final one.
~Chelle~ |
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