| Posted by Bradd Howard on 07/01/05 at 06:47 PM jeana I like this as well lots of good imagery and word play... I just have one question? why the double space between every line? maybe I am being picky but it makes every line seem seperate from everything else and doesn't add to the flow of the poem. some things should be seperate some should be together... you have this poem down word wise... I would work with the form though... just my suggestion | 