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crammingdowncrowded

by Frankie Sanchez

a middle finger extends in a passing car
behind glass; and it changes nothing.
extended finger -- fingernail clipped;
a clean cut curse,
and all who observe it have
similar thoughts.

fuck you.

we're all cramming down crowded streets,
onboard humid trains,
in restraining elevators,
no more roomforspacebetweencharacters
so close we can smell intentions.
so close we'rebleedingintooneandother.

and we're dying
to tell everyone around us
to fuck off,
to fuck themselves,
how bad we want to fuck them,
fuck you.

who can do it harder,
who can do it faster,
who can get away with it,
from behind glass,
from outside our comfort zone,

i swear
if it wasn't a middle finger
it would have been a penis
just as erect, just as vulgar,
just as in your face, up inside you

cramming down crowded,
onboard humid,
in restraining,

and to passers by with middle fingers
this is how we look
youyouyouyouyoumeyouyou.
no more room for s p a c e
betweencharacters.

06/22/2005

Author's Note: and to a boy with salty fingers, i'm an open wound...

Posted on 06/23/2005
Copyright © 2024 Frankie Sanchez

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Paul Marino on 06/23/05 at 01:50 AM

ha, i was smiling throughout. very nice.

Posted by Beth K Hannah on 06/23/05 at 03:46 AM

i like this take on people/society. I often marvel at how much weight one finger carries

Posted by Christina Butcher on 07/04/05 at 08:50 AM

wonderful poem. one of the best that i've read in a long time

Posted by Quinlan L Gibson on 07/06/05 at 11:12 PM

"so close we can smell intentions"...hot.

Posted by Charlie Morgan on 10/27/05 at 09:17 PM

...frankie, well you've been discovered, ahh by my old arse...saw your post on coco's POTD and man i love this diatribe of rightfulness of us poor[sic] bipeds and our needs and it 'sorta makes you understand why dogs eat their own vomit, and lions eat their young',eh?...after this i gotta put you on my favs...you write good...peace, chaz

Posted by Anya Kaats on 12/14/06 at 05:50 AM

yes yes yes, liked it a lot

Posted by Lauren Singer on 01/25/07 at 05:25 PM

holt sh*t. this gave me chill. new fav. that authors note was just as powerful as the rest of the poem, too.

Posted by A. Paige White on 04/26/07 at 06:11 PM

Guesstheresroomtocrowdonemorecomment.GREATWRITING!

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