| Posted by Michelle Angelini on 06/23/05 at 09:53 AM Rula, your poem goes through a maze of uncertainty leading to a point where strength and survival are vital - no matter what the narrator must go through to get there. Your words are like riding in a slipstream, until the realization of self-strength. Your images are clear and shocking so that the reader can identify with the narrator.
~Chelle~ |
| Posted by Ashok Sharda on 06/25/05 at 04:31 AM Yes, we are all bound to the laws as all happenings, all events, all our moods, all our thoughts are. The paradox is that we can only defy these laws by using them. And this is what you seem to be doing all along these experiences, you have depicted here'On the Edge, Determined - II'', a continuity of your battle against the onslought of these laws which is bound to chase you to your imminent desinence, if you refuse to 'STOP'and defy these laws by using them to your own advantage. And when you do that theres a surprise-"'What a surprise that I am winning
Remembering to remember
Applying the logic of logic
In the continuity of the moment'. There are six laws which predominantly effects our lives. The law of fate, accident,cause and effect,deviation,association and repetition.These are the laws which almost determines all the happening we foolishly treat as our doings.These are the laws which can be used to undetermine those happenings by undoing.Well, if one is determined to ' BE HERE JUST NOW!', if one is determined to 'STOP' the laws from taking its own course, One can attain one's goal which is still afar,
When shall 'I' become my attention
Letting my external fall
Un-barricading my pathless path?'
A determined battle is the only way and the only solace an impeccable warrior can draw.
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