| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Ava Blu on 06/06/05 at 02:48 AM Love it; you always do well in uncomfortable situations. |
| Posted by Bradd Howard on 06/06/05 at 07:00 PM this is $#%@ing beautiful! all though I am a little jealous of the person you are sitting next to... amazing daddy |
| Posted by Felicia Aguilar on 06/08/05 at 10:26 PM This is really great. I love the simplicty and bare honesty of it. |
| Posted by Ashok Sharda on 06/09/05 at 04:46 PM Well, the title sounds a bit gloomy but the poem ends on a positive note-'until i sat next to you
and breathed'. I see not only life but charmful too despite the 'backing off'.
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| Posted by Rula Shin on 06/09/05 at 04:59 PM Yes, I agree with Ashok, I'm not sure I understand the title, perhaps in a 'dead city' that which is beautiful and alive stands out even more? The poem is just so lovely, and positive and this person seems beautiful and comforting. Well written and very poignant last lines :-) |
| Posted by Maryellen Lebeda-Parra on 06/13/05 at 07:59 PM as you know ... i always enjoy your work ... but this is SOOOO comfortably amzing ... i wish to have used more expressive words in my description ... but i must be a good girl |
| Posted by Melanie J Yarbrough on 06/17/05 at 03:22 AM i like this |
| Posted by Frankie Sanchez on 06/20/05 at 06:58 PM this is... breath-taking. wow. |
| Posted by Karl Waldbauer on 06/22/05 at 08:28 AM Congrats on POTD. I'm glad your library was brought to my attention...what a wonderful find! |
| Posted by Felicia Aguilar on 06/22/05 at 08:15 PM I saw this on the homepage and remembered it, so I thought I would stop by and say congratulations on making POTD! |
| Posted by James Cavet on 07/04/05 at 12:18 AM I can see each part like a snapshot slideshow. Interesting and well done. |
| Posted by Olivia Weinkein on 08/19/08 at 04:07 AM gorgeous. |
| Posted by A. Reed on 10/09/11 at 07:33 PM You've an awesome library. |
