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Struggle

by Jeffrey Parren

water covered leaf
by a nightÂ’s rainy downpour
fights for composure

04/12/2005

Posted on 04/13/2005
Copyright © 2024 Jeffrey Parren

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Charlie Morgan on 04/13/05 at 07:31 PM

...jeffrey, what a delightful scene, i "am" the leaf in a downpour, you paint this one quite well...peace,chaz

Posted by Paul Marino on 09/20/05 at 09:30 AM

well, i like the first two lines, but what i've learned about haiku is that you're not really supposed to attribute feelings to nature.

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