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Necklace of Surrender
by Tota LongmireA daisy chain of blood drops
Draped about her neck.
A deadly scarlet necklace
She can never wear again.
Petals fall and stain the floor.
Sliding slowly down the wall
She goes and joins them there.
The daisy stems grow longer
Wilting towards the ground
Created of her lifeblood
They'll grow until she's dead. 03/31/2005 Posted on 04/01/2005
Copyright © 2024 Tota Longmire
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Uriel Tovar on 04/02/05 at 01:51 AM i like what you do in the last line with the abrupt ending but it might be over done.i like what you do in the last line with the abrupt ending but it might be over done. in a way you want it to be unresolved with that ending because dead is such a pause and move away from the meter but on the other hand it might confuse the reader |
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