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inhaling vapors
by Shonda CreemerI wish I could
hiccup you
o
u
t
but your air is too
thick and I guess
I am suffocating
on the lack of
us in me
or is it the
you in us
either way
I can't breath
without dying
inside these
empty pockets
of love 03/18/2005 Posted on 03/19/2005
Copyright © 2024 Shonda Creemer
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Mary Ellen Smith on 03/19/05 at 02:24 PM Wow...vivid! Found myself holding my breath while I read it! |
| Posted by Mark Maxey on 03/19/05 at 08:19 PM this is such a vivid and mezmorinzing poem! Great job...with imagery, heart, it says it all! |
| Posted by Paul Marino on 03/21/05 at 11:55 PM i really enjoyed, "on the lack of/us in me/or is it the/you in us". very clever and a well structured poem. |
| Posted by Kalikala Smith on 03/24/05 at 01:52 AM the last line is my favorite... empty pockets of love... that's just an awesome visual in itself. great work. |
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