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rough draft

by Shonda Creemer

letters grouped
to make
words formed
to make
sentences

thought made real
with the stroke
of a pen

a line of feelings
rushing forth
born from
yesterday & today

each piece all it's own
yet
so much a part of me

my
rough draft
of
life

03/06/2005

Author's Note: still editing my life

Posted on 03/07/2005
Copyright © 2024 Shonda Creemer

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Ava Blu on 03/07/05 at 03:20 AM

I like it a lot. I would take out the last line though. With the title being "Rough Draft," I feel like you don't really need that last line. Unless you changed the title to "My Rough Draft of Life." =)

Posted by Marcus Jones on 03/07/05 at 04:34 AM

i think that it is fine as is with just a few tweaks here and there.

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