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rough draft
by Shonda Chrissonberryletters grouped
to make
words formed
to make
sentences
thought made real
with the stroke
of a pen
a line of feelings
rushing forth
born from
yesterday & today
each piece all it's own
yet
so much a part of me
my
rough draft
of
life 03/06/2005 Author's Note: still editing my life
Posted on 03/07/2005
Copyright © 2025 Shonda Chrissonberry
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Ava Blu on 03/07/05 at 03:20 AM I like it a lot. I would take out the last line though. With the title being "Rough Draft," I feel like you don't really need that last line. Unless you changed the title to "My Rough Draft of Life." =) |
| Posted by Marcus Jones on 03/07/05 at 04:34 AM i think that it is fine as is with just a few tweaks here and there. |
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