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by Shonda Creemer

I can’t bear this
lonely existence
much longer

Father
Do You hear?
Hear my heart lament?

Do You?

I plead
just tell me how
to make it

to the beginning
to the love
to the warmth

of my other

01/31/2005

Posted on 02/03/2005
Copyright © 2024 Shonda Creemer

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Paul Marino on 02/05/05 at 08:59 PM

ah, i misread the last word as "mother", instead of "other". "the warmth of my", and "mother", as you ask your father. i have to say, and i'm not trying to re-work your poem, but i like "mother" better, though "other" works equally as well. on second, third, and fourth reads, i do like "other" better, because it can stand for mother or other, as in your future mate, which i assume it does after reading your bio. it leaves it more open. very good poem, as it's made me read it several times.

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