confusion drowning my heart lies peeling away my skin I am numb again falling from your ledge your guilt consumes my head I feel force fed my shame is stripping your disease is building my mouth is dripping you cannot live in these shoes I refuse to give in again perplexed in deep waters my soul is exposed I have no where else to go.
01/11/2005
intriguing... i have felt this before, in a relationship... i dig the visuals... blessings...
the images in this poem don't seem to flow that well together. it seems that a lot of them are just thrown together to add effect. also, i don't think the broken rhyme pattern adds to this poem. the sentiment is there, just not the form.
