Rain Comes Down by Charles J Hannan You didn't have to say a word I could see it in your eyes You didn't have to fill me in I knew this was the last goodbye And as I thought back to the better days Of all the good times that we made I heard the locks click on your suitcase Now my sunny days are in the shade Will this really be the ending Of a beautiful story About a love so comprehending Now you're on my mind As the rain comes down Pouring down 11/25/2004 Author's Note: This is an unfinished song. Posted on 11/25/2004 Copyright © 2025 Charles J Hannan Member Comments on this Poem Posted by Michelle Angelini on 11/25/04 at 05:32 AM Charles, I don't know much about songwriting, but this is the start of some good lyrics. Just a suggestion (take it or leave it), maybe you could equate the locks clicking with a thought or realization that clicks in your mind, and other images the same way. Good luck with the revision, I look forward to seeing it. Return to the Previous Page   pathetic.org Version 7.3.2 May 2004 Terms and Conditions of Use 0 member(s) and 2 visitor(s) online All works Copyright © 2025 their respective authors. Page Generated In 0 Second(s)