| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Karl Waldbauer on 09/26/04 at 02:17 AM A most interesting relationship here that I would like to explore...from a great distance. I keep hearing a Sumerian echo here and wonder... |
| Posted by Ginette T Belle on 09/26/04 at 04:08 AM wow...flow is amazingly smooth, love the blunt truth...great job |
| Posted by Mike Loftis on 09/26/04 at 04:48 AM This is extremely well done. Great work. |
| Posted by Michele Schottelkorb on 09/26/04 at 07:21 PM i'm speechless, and that is rare... i have not read the inspiration for this piece (but i will) and stand-alone, this raw and biting bit is pure genius... my POTD vote for today... i'm putting this up on the fridge... intriguing how no matter what one does, one may never be able to do enough... awesome piece... blessings... |
| Posted by Alex Smyth on 09/26/04 at 11:18 PM Very good on it's own standing, but when read along with the link to Betheny's, it takes on all kinds of proportions. What can I say, the last stanza is perfect, and classic Max. Love it all. |
| Posted by Laura Doom on 09/27/04 at 07:13 PM I also read Bethany's 'Spherical Earth' - & these two pieces do complement each other. I enjoyed the ironies in this - 'the earth moved [between us]' - and particularly the last stanza, reversing the sequence of crucifiction and saviour status. Good and evil :>
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| Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 09/28/04 at 11:49 AM A Worldview that is so correct! In this life, the natural tendency is to reject the good and cling to the evil! And indeed "man" did crucify the one who came to "save"! This poem has both an immediate significance and a universal application as well. |
| Posted by Sarah Graves on 09/29/04 at 12:19 AM Max, you convey your thoughts so well in this audacious piece. The biblical connotations blended perfectly..great read. |
| Posted by Mara Meade on 09/29/04 at 12:30 AM WHOA! This is defensive "knowing" at it's finest. Excellent work and thought, Max. |
| Posted by Ashok Sharda on 09/29/04 at 12:59 AM This 'addiction' sounds like the 'earth' between the 'good and evil', the very basis of our existence.'Sin' looks like a humanly dignified term here. It is. |
| Posted by Lindsay Sanders on 09/29/04 at 02:56 AM the last two stanzas hold more meaning than i could attempt to grasp in one sitting. this is one of those poems you could read many many times & still get something out of it each time. i'm adding this to my favorite- it's incredible. |
| Posted by Jolie Jordan on 09/29/04 at 04:50 AM God Max.... this is beyond amazing. I keep reading it over and over, and I don't know why. |
| Posted by Elizabeth Jill on 01/10/06 at 05:50 AM This is completely mesmerizing. muting my mind with the paradox. past memorable. |
| Posted by Maria Terezia Ferencz on 07/29/06 at 01:43 AM Whoa what a mind bend, how true it is though. I am amazed by this one. What a rush. |
