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Kiss Me While I'm Still Breathing

by Mike Loftis

Kiss me while I'm still breathing
this distance between us is death to me
I lie awake while you sleep
moving closer to feel your breath
It caresses my neglected skin
My eyes close for a time
allowing my heart a moment of fantasy
Reality returns and I see my star
framed by the window
against a background of night
It falls from the sky
presenting me one wish
My wish is made and now I wait
Only you can grant it
Kiss me while I'm still breathing

mike loftis
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09/11/2004

Posted on 09/12/2004
Copyright © 2024 Mike Loftis

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Amanda L Marron on 09/13/04 at 12:53 AM

this reminds me so much of how i view a certain someone. great write.

Posted by Mara Meade on 09/14/04 at 01:45 AM

I have always loved this one! Glad you posted it again!

Posted by Marjorie Anne Reagan on 09/14/04 at 03:32 AM

A great lesson in treating each day as if it were your first and last. Universal and timely. Beautifully written.

Posted by Rula Shin on 09/15/04 at 01:02 PM

Ah Mike, you have some wonderful lines here, my favorite being, “your breath…caresses my neglected skin” – closing eyes closing that insurmountable gap if only for a moment. A touching expression of love propelled by a desperate plea for revival of a dying heart. Very lovely and a great write! :-)

Posted by Anne Engelen on 09/16/04 at 05:11 PM

i find this rather sad, reminds me of love gone cold where one party still longs for the warmth it used to radiate. Lovely read!

Posted by Alison McKenzie on 09/25/04 at 08:51 PM

This is absolutely wonderful and paints such a clear picture of how it feels to be in a moment without the one you're with.

Posted by Mara Meade on 09/28/04 at 02:25 PM

Back again for another read... GAWD, what a line... "kiss me while I'm still breathing." This is my favourite of yours.

Posted by Maureen Glaude on 09/29/04 at 08:14 PM

stunning in anticipation of one of the pleasures in life we can't put a price tag on.

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