| Posted by Rula Shin on 04/14/04 at 12:28 AM Ooh very intense indeed! First thing I saw was, “I feel your hands around my neck…your eyes filled with hate for me…you’ll write your confession with my blood” – ah yes very clever and a wonderful opposition to the seeming ‘love’ content of the poem that speaks of “soft as [your] lips…heart beating…thankful to be [with] you”. I really like the way you reveal the conflict in the relationship. Hidden in words, as most likely, the real conflict is…and though you write words of tenderness in this “love…letter,” there on your own tongue is the fear and trepidation spelled out in no uncertain terms….great piece! |
