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retreat
by Richard TrotterWith hope,these failing efforts
a dim but tender light,
may spark a gentle glory
doomed but dying bright.
These minutes of enchantment
will illustrate the night
the knot of our pulses
and one more broken flight. 04/08/2004 Posted on 04/08/2004
Copyright © 2025 Richard Trotter
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Ashok Sharda on 04/10/04 at 03:31 AM 'may spark a gentle glory
doomed but dying bright.' beautiful lines the central idea of this profound piece. The approach is so positive and full of life despite the gloom.
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| Posted by Michele Schottelkorb on 04/11/04 at 09:09 AM excellent rhyming here... i love this piece... you can feel the deperation, yet there is a sense of hope and knowledge that tomorrow is a new day... and should tomorrow not call, one will go out shining bright... very good, richard... well conveyed... blessings... |
| Posted by Mary Ellen Smith on 04/11/04 at 11:43 AM This little poem has a big spirit to it...and courage too. Isn't that what it takes sometimes to retreat? Love it. |
| Posted by Rula Shin on 04/12/04 at 08:14 PM Beautiful words of hope amidst "dim...failing efforts" - like finding a shining truth before the final dull "retreat" of one more "broken flight" - that's my take in any case. Nicely done :-)
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| Posted by Paganini Jones on 05/09/04 at 08:20 PM Not many poets can pull off rhyme, but this is good. Effective, even powerful in its brevity. |
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