by Richard Vince

Circling in...closer
And closer and paler
Like the sky splitting
Into a thousand stars

Clouds breaking up
Fragments littering the Earth
Dust of a thousand centuries
Kicked aside by careless feet
Standing by the side of the road
Waiting, waiting for clearing

Wrapped up against the wind...
The biting chill that tears the soul
Ripping my skin
Shredding my tears
Killing my hope, my joy

And so, we end...
Every manoeuvre carefully executed

And so, we end.


Posted on 04/04/2004
Copyright © 2024 Richard Vince

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Rula Shin on 04/07/04 at 09:12 PM

"And so, we end…Every manoeuvre carefully executed Execution" - very well said...very sad. If I might make one suggestion though it would be to take out the very last line as it is a bit redundant and does not retain the same impact as the line I quoted above...the above sounds more like the 'final' stanza should sound like...just my humble opinion of course :-)

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