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Everyone Listen

by Jared Winkler

I'm going to write a poem
that will be badly rated
cause it won't make any sense
It will be full of my emotion
marking my past
so I can remember

I'm going to write a poem
I'll have to duplicate from memory
cause it got erased the first time*

I'm going to write a poem
cause someone told me to
and I agreed
It won't be for the sake of poetry
or English Grammar
Words might be slepled wtrong
but that's the way I want it

I'm going to write a poem
that repeats a certain phrase
that even annoys me
(deleted line)

Shit...I'm going to write a poem

I should come with a warning label
don't think I give a shit about you
cause it's really going to fucking hurt
when I detatch from reality
and go back to my old infatuations
It's all about what I want

and now for some dedications

you're right man
it is just
a soap opera
with different actors

shit... it is what it is

and you
Keep pretending that you're real fucked up
you have no idea how much it excites me.
You give me the time of day here and there but sometimes you won't give it to me anywhere
I want you so bad.
I can't help it
you're a cool chick

God, I could write a book on you
but I heard people can't read in their dreams

Give me the fucking mic

cause I have ridiculously profound philosophical ideas
that don't even make any sense if you think real hard

I don't know why you're still reading
I'm getting tired of writing

I'm tired of fighting
and I'm still waiting
for the first round
to begin

Let's all run away
If everyone goes no one will get in trouble.
isn't that funny

watch it... I'm gonna break your heart
and I like doing it
don't believe me?
why not if it's something you have to do?

Don't you dare do it to me

I love my life but I don't take it seriously
except when I take it way too seriously

I can't think of much more
maybe a clever ending?
Nah. I'm done.



03/22/2004

Author's Note: This was so much better before.

Posted on 03/22/2004
Copyright © 2024 Jared Winkler

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Deanna M Gritsonis on 03/25/04 at 04:47 PM

Jared listen.... you're awesome. ;) Very well done.

Posted by Nadia Gilbert Kent on 01/23/07 at 03:45 AM

This was fun. I don't know you personally, but you painted yourself as a very charismatic fellow, to whom I related to throughout the piece. The only thing I'd critique is your tendency to hold back. I feel like there are some missed opportunities, in terms of what could be exposed (you've probably heard the saying, "show, don't tell"... which is basically what I mean). Although, keep in mind, I'm a very visual person, so perhaps it's best to ignore me altogether. Good show, overall.

Posted by Megan Langley on 03/30/08 at 12:54 AM

I can't put my finger on it, but there's just something about this poem that really got me. nicely done

Posted by Frankie Sanchez on 10/26/09 at 09:29 PM

This just made my day.

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