if only syllables counted

by Allan Haslinds

You ever noticed

that the ceiling in our lounge

looks like a waffle?


Posted on 03/15/2004
Copyright © 2021 Allan Haslinds

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Alex Smyth on 03/16/04 at 03:03 PM

Made me laugh right out loud. Then I thought, "Hey, that is sorta profound..." (Something about that form just demands respect:o)

Posted by Betania Tesch on 03/18/04 at 05:54 AM

you make me shiver with honesty and unstrip the accoutrements of reality into a pureness that is almost absurd...but not laughable.

Posted by Kara Hayostek on 03/18/04 at 10:54 PM

The only time I have eveer noticed a ceiling is when im ummm....Nice Poem.

Posted by Ginette T Belle on 03/19/04 at 04:23 AM

cute, very cute...

Posted by Jeanne Marie Hoffman on 04/15/04 at 07:32 PM

Well they do say that people explore the simplistic bits of life in haikus, and that's a simplistic I think as one can get.

Posted by JD Clay on 05/08/04 at 05:26 PM

Now there's a haiku that'll really hold your syrup. Catchey poem, Allan. Pe4ce...

Posted by Paul Lastovica on 05/31/07 at 03:28 PM

my ceiling appears to have goosebumps.

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