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Torn Between
by Christel CrewsTorn between two extremes
the one I want
the one I don't need
A dead-end path either way
one won't go
the other won't stay
Confusion is my conscious state
is he gone for good
or should I wait
He let me go and pulled away
now let me be, no hope
I will not stay
Or him fickle nature, from my past
knocking at my door
I doubt he will last
Do I give him a chance
to rebuild what was lost
is it worth a second glance
Torn between two extremes
do I know what I want
I don't know what I need
02/04/2004 Author's Note: what can i say? it seems a bit choppy to me, but i'm my worst critique... any suggestions in how to smooth this piece out?
Posted on 02/12/2004
Copyright © 2024 Christel Crews
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Rula Shin on 02/12/04 at 07:33 PM Wow, I really felt the tug here..I like the poem the way it is now actually. Maybe there is an alterior path you haven't yet seen which has more potential than these "dead ends"...you may not know what you want or need at the moment...but you do know that dead ends are fruitless. The answer should lie there...you need to find yet another path to walk on. One should never knowingly begin a fruitless journey - what a waste of precious time!! haha well that's my interpretation anyway :-) Your words really portray the struggle of the subject, the confusion and frustration. Great read! |
| Posted by Madeline Pestolesi on 02/12/04 at 11:55 PM Ok, well, I know it's cheesy but think about this "Hurt me once, shame on you. Hurt me twice, shame on me." Be careful. Also, I do really like this poem. |
| Posted by Jean Mollett on 02/17/04 at 06:52 AM Hi Christel,
I wouldn't change a thing, it's very good. it shows just how love can be. It's not always easy, but we try anyway. Not to give up on love so easy. But there comes a time, maybe one should move forward without them. |
| Posted by Jean Mollett on 02/17/04 at 06:53 AM It's full of emotions about love. |
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