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Face-Break (Senryu)
by Aaron BlairYou should split my lips
open, kiss the blood away,
drink my broken smile. 01/22/2004 Author's Note: Whittled into senryu form from a slightly longer, yet still only with three lines, poem that I posted in my LiveJournal.
Posted on 01/23/2004
Copyright © 2024 Aaron Blair
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Kristine Briese on 01/26/04 at 03:48 AM Brilliant and vibrant; that last line is a sharp instrument. |
| Posted by Rula Shin on 01/27/04 at 01:08 AM "drink my broken smile," Wow...very heart wrenching. With just three lines you paint a passionate and tragic picture. I really like the imagery and the conflict it envokes, "kiss the blood away" - the dark, biting contradiction of this love/hate relationship. Brilliant! This is a new favorite of mine :-) |
| Posted by Rachelle Howe on 01/27/04 at 05:18 PM goddamn. stake me again will ya? |
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