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Shattered

by Dana E Brossard

Reaching outwards, he grasped and pulled.
Felt the forces of natures flow through,
Heard the millions giving him strength,
Tasted the bitterness of Fate,
Smelled the sweet scent of the world,
Saw the workings of the universe.

The Nothingness that he held tightly,
Filled with hate and nightmares,
Screaming murder and torture,
Putrid from disease and pestilence,
Reeking with death and decay,
Twisted round the world in a barrier of mist.

He tried to bind the darkness,
To lock it away forever, but he failed,
There were too many and too far spread,
And The forces of good were defeated,
The peoples of earth enslaved.
He tried to save them, but Shattered the World.

01/08/2004

Author's Note: I don't know about this. I don't really like the way it came out, but having written I feel the need to post it.

Posted on 01/08/2004
Copyright © 2024 Dana E Brossard

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Maureen Glaude on 01/08/04 at 01:54 PM

I think it's likely your best, Dana. Holds us right there, with the contrasts of emotions and the weight of so much on the shoulders, with the tool of destruction (but for good) in the hand. The title and ending perfect.

Posted by Leandra K Brossard on 01/11/04 at 06:54 AM

[font color ="purple"] *hugs* I love this one, it's so weighty with deliberation... the final line falls like a hammer stroke, very powerful.. [/font]

Posted by Leandra K Brossard on 01/11/04 at 06:55 AM

*grins* Apparently I haven't got the code for color change right yet.. :)

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