Brevity and Rainfall

by Kristine Briese

Unencumbered by your name
but remembering your touch
I lift my face to the rain.
Knowing there's little chance of it
I beg for an angel to pray for me
between this breath and the next.
As I expected, there's
no time for such niceties.
The angels are too busy
guiding the raindrops
away from the desperate
ghosts of your lovers.


Author's Note: I'm not much of one for love poems, as this probably makes clear. *grin*

Posted on 12/28/2003
Copyright © 2022 Kristine Briese

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Aaron Blair on 12/29/03 at 01:18 AM

I won't lie and say it's your best poem ever, but I think it's still pretty good.

Posted by Michele Schottelkorb on 12/29/03 at 02:15 AM

intriguing prose... i like it :)... blessings...

Posted by Charles E Minshall on 12/29/03 at 05:50 AM

Angels sometimes appear when least expected..Good poem Kris...Charlie

Posted by Rachelle Howe on 12/29/03 at 02:43 PM

*dies laughing* i'm definitely wanting to quote sarah right now. definitely.

Posted by Max Bouillet on 12/30/03 at 04:50 PM

So much to think about in this one. Great images: the breath, the rain, the angels, the ghosts. All the images swell together into a puddle of melancholoy that I am sure to tread through and carry home with me to stain my carpet. Wow.

Posted by JD Clay on 02/02/04 at 02:59 AM

This appers to be one of those bittersweet love poems, Kristine. I have found that when it comes to relationships, it's not the rain that gets you, it's the puddles. You, however, have found the sunshine in this metaphor. Pe4ce...

Posted by Anne Howe on 03/01/05 at 01:05 PM

this really is a 'raspberry' in a poem. :)

Posted by Gregory O'Neill on 10/04/06 at 06:42 PM

Thanks for the read. Enjoyed this.

Posted by Laura Doom on 05/31/07 at 12:13 AM

Well, I can't see through it :)

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