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Open Palmed (unfinished)

by Vikki Owens

Surrender is calamity,
yet I turn my hands palm up and
whisper submit.

12/12/2003

Posted on 12/13/2003
Copyright © 2022 Vikki Owens

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Richard Paez on 12/16/03 at 03:12 PM

I find this very interesting. Short as it is, thereís a certain tone to it that feels perfect. As it stands, it seems to me almost as a riddle. What are you accepting? Someoneís hand? A drug? Something more figurative? I donít know what your plans for this are, but I would like to see where you go with it. If you could keep the same concrete tone with abstract style throughout, it would be awesome. Or maybe the poem really is finished, and the (unfinished) in the title is the answer to the riddle: whenever we submit, surrender, we give up a part of ourselves; we render ourselves unfinished, incomplete. So intriguing, like a good haiku. Thank you for sharing this Vikki. {m}

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