| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Max Bouillet on 12/10/03 at 10:05 PM Exquisite poem with loads of emotion-laden imagery. "now i just drink green tea
and pray that i'm not dead" fantastic ending that really leaves an impression! :) |
| Posted by Britt Zimmerman on 12/10/03 at 11:20 PM I agree with max, the last 2 lines are a stab in the heart. Very nice and full of emotion! LOVE IT :) |
| Posted by John Ilotan on 12/10/03 at 11:24 PM Not only is the ending poignant and sharp, the title flows into the first stanza to capture the readers attention. Gripping and heartfelt. Excellent work. |
| Posted by Don Coffman on 12/12/03 at 08:58 AM Really interesting and nicely done, and yet another thumbs up for those closing lines, it's a strong ending. There's a somewhat disjointed feeling to it in the first stanza and the first few lines of the second, though I think it's an interesting effect for the subject. |
| Posted by Kristine Briese on 12/16/03 at 07:56 PM Fantastic impact, especially at the end. |
| Posted by Richard Trotter on 12/17/03 at 11:49 PM a great read that captures a lot of poignant emotion. i will have to listen to the song, as I am a fan of Ryan Adams:) |
| Posted by Nadia Gilbert Kent on 12/24/03 at 07:33 AM This was found to be quite loveable indeed. |
| Posted by Alison McKenzie on 01/10/04 at 05:04 PM I've read a couple of your poems now, and you seem to have this wonderful way of capturing one or two nano-seconds in a lifetime and building an entire picutre of them!!! I am really enjoying reading your work!!! |
