|Member Comments on this Poem|
|Posted by Max Bouillet on 12/10/03 at 10:05 PM|
Exquisite poem with loads of emotion-laden imagery. "now i just drink green tea
and pray that i'm not dead" fantastic ending that really leaves an impression! :)
|Posted by Britt Zimmerman on 12/10/03 at 11:20 PM|
I agree with max, the last 2 lines are a stab in the heart. Very nice and full of emotion! LOVE IT :)
|Posted by John Ilotan on 12/10/03 at 11:24 PM|
Not only is the ending poignant and sharp, the title flows into the first stanza to capture the readers attention. Gripping and heartfelt. Excellent work.
|Posted by Don Coffman on 12/12/03 at 08:58 AM|
Really interesting and nicely done, and yet another thumbs up for those closing lines, it's a strong ending. There's a somewhat disjointed feeling to it in the first stanza and the first few lines of the second, though I think it's an interesting effect for the subject.
|Posted by Kristine Briese on 12/16/03 at 07:56 PM|
Fantastic impact, especially at the end.
|Posted by Richard Trotter on 12/17/03 at 11:49 PM|
a great read that captures a lot of poignant emotion. i will have to listen to the song, as I am a fan of Ryan Adams:)
|Posted by Nadia Gilbert Kent on 12/24/03 at 07:33 AM|
This was found to be quite loveable indeed.
|Posted by Alison McKenzie on 01/10/04 at 05:04 PM|
I've read a couple of your poems now, and you seem to have this wonderful way of capturing one or two nano-seconds in a lifetime and building an entire picutre of them!!! I am really enjoying reading your work!!!