|Member Comments on this Poem|
|Posted by Aaron Blair on 11/29/03 at 07:39 PM|
I like the metaphor in the first two stanzas, especially the lighthouse part.
|Posted by Kristine Briese on 11/29/03 at 08:44 PM|
I love its concreteness.
|Posted by Lindsay Sanders on 11/30/03 at 08:45 PM|
i love it. the last stanza is just stunning. a beautiful little piece.
|Posted by Max Bouillet on 12/01/03 at 11:32 PM|
Laura was right... glad you reposted. I especially like the last stanza for it shows the multi-layered thought process that we all have. Those thoughts the build us up and those thoughts that tear us down. Great read.
|Posted by Trisha De Gracia on 12/02/03 at 02:09 AM|
I like this. Even the way it's centred reminds me of waves. You are so brilliant, you know that?
|Posted by Laura Doom on 12/22/03 at 10:14 PM|
...pretty much alone? Not my impression - anyway, one of my favourites since I first read it
|Posted by Tom Goss on 09/14/04 at 03:55 PM|
This one works well centered, and is well-centered.
For some reason I love this: "the waves lap
like dehydrated animals."
|Posted by Kristine Briese on 12/10/06 at 04:49 PM|
I'm back again, and look what made POTD. Congratulations, darlin'.
|Posted by Michelle Angelini on 12/11/06 at 03:57 AM|
CONGRATULATIONS on POTD! This is wonderfully contemplative. It's like my transformation poems. The form and similes are excellent. I'm tired right now, so I can't think of anything more brilliant to say, except that I love it!
|Posted by Lauren Singer on 12/11/06 at 07:23 AM|
soooo glad to see this as POTD. as you know i'm an avid reader, but it's great to see that others feel so strongly as i do about your writing. that 2nd stanza floored me.
|Posted by Leslie Ann Eisenberg on 12/11/06 at 07:30 AM|
coolness...amazing first stanza, truly unforgettable. dehydrated animals, now there's an image that will stick. memorable...a quality piece. congrats on potd. PK
|Posted by Angela Stevens on 07/15/11 at 07:34 PM|
Very vivid, I like this a lot.
|Posted by Anya Kaats on 02/23/12 at 01:17 AM|
the last stanza is so beautiful and so easy to relate to. really good read, i felt like i was right there.