alone (at midnight)

by Rachelle Howe

(belonging to such
broken legs)
stand like some corroded
light house,
curled against the
land-bridge of my torso.
arms, that sacred quiet place,
are wrapped around, and i
sit silent.

the waves lap
like dehydrated animals
up and crashing into
the shore, the rim to
earth's eternal fountain of youth.

and in my head,
i sit alone
at midnight
all the things i hope
to become
and all the things
i could never live up to.


Author's Note: laura doom wanted me to repost this. so i have. it's been one of my favorites for awhile, but i seem to be pretty much alone in that opinion. :)

Posted on 11/29/2003
Copyright © 2022 Rachelle Howe

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Aaron Blair on 11/29/03 at 07:39 PM

I like the metaphor in the first two stanzas, especially the lighthouse part.

Posted by Kristine Briese on 11/29/03 at 08:44 PM

I love its concreteness.

Posted by Lindsay Sanders on 11/30/03 at 08:45 PM

i love it. the last stanza is just stunning. a beautiful little piece.

Posted by Max Bouillet on 12/01/03 at 11:32 PM

Laura was right... glad you reposted. I especially like the last stanza for it shows the multi-layered thought process that we all have. Those thoughts the build us up and those thoughts that tear us down. Great read.

Posted by Trisha De Gracia on 12/02/03 at 02:09 AM

I like this. Even the way it's centred reminds me of waves. You are so brilliant, you know that?

Posted by Laura Doom on 12/22/03 at 10:14 PM

...pretty much alone? Not my impression - anyway, one of my favourites since I first read it

Posted by Tom Goss on 09/14/04 at 03:55 PM

This one works well centered, and is well-centered. For some reason I love this: "the waves lap like dehydrated animals."

Posted by Kristine Briese on 12/10/06 at 04:49 PM

I'm back again, and look what made POTD. Congratulations, darlin'.

Posted by Michelle Angelini on 12/11/06 at 03:57 AM

CONGRATULATIONS on POTD! This is wonderfully contemplative. It's like my transformation poems. The form and similes are excellent. I'm tired right now, so I can't think of anything more brilliant to say, except that I love it!

Posted by Lauren Singer on 12/11/06 at 07:23 AM

soooo glad to see this as POTD. as you know i'm an avid reader, but it's great to see that others feel so strongly as i do about your writing. that 2nd stanza floored me.

Posted by Leslie Ann Eisenberg on 12/11/06 at 07:30 AM

coolness...amazing first stanza, truly unforgettable. dehydrated animals, now there's an image that will stick. memorable...a quality piece. congrats on potd. PK

Posted by Angela Stevens on 07/15/11 at 07:34 PM

Very vivid, I like this a lot.

Posted by Anya Kaats on 02/23/12 at 01:17 AM

the last stanza is so beautiful and so easy to relate to. really good read, i felt like i was right there.

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