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Exfoliation

by Leslie Ann Eisenberg

Face mashed
in the mattress,
I awake to a mysterious alarm,
my left hand tracing the map of my stomach,
right hand clutching my throat

I am still
as morning dew
on a Japanese maple leaf,
long before dawn cracks and
burns me off

Nestled in the woods of my mind
quiet thoughts roost,
I slumber in distant, syrupy visions, and
waken to the quickening pulse of sparrow songs
that vibrate my bedroom window

My fingers spread
apart the cobwebs, searching for a clearer view,
They get dirty turning over the topsoil,
revealing spongy red loam below,
encrusted with minerals
that leave a metallic morning tang on my breath

I lay in the sweat of
my bed, a cottony tongue
probing my mouth for
remnants of an ever-fading reverie

Alas,

for when I arise, when I bathe and brush,
the remains of my heavenly maple syrup dream
will dry and crack and drown
in the shower drain

07/21/2003

Posted on 11/26/2003
Copyright © 2025 Leslie Ann Eisenberg

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Charles E Minshall on 11/26/03 at 04:19 AM

Excellent read Leslie....Charlie

Posted by Mainon A Schwartz on 11/26/03 at 05:59 AM

You seem to have a weakness for syrup-imagery... but I actually said "whoa" aloud from the very first stanza-- and it didn't let me down after that. I particularly love the tongue probing your mouth for the aftertaste of a dream-- that's purely and utterly wonderful.

Posted by Cole Miller on 11/28/03 at 01:42 AM

i'm going to go along with everyone else and say that the imagery is amazing.

Posted by Max Bouillet on 11/28/03 at 04:45 PM

This was a great verse to drink in. It left me parched and craving more. :)

Posted by Rachelle Howe on 11/28/03 at 04:55 PM

i'm with ms. schwartz. this is one of the stronger pieces i've read of yours. i you use syrup stuff twice, though it ties in if you want to keep it htat way. that was the only flaw i found. lovely.

Posted by Leonard M Hawkes on 11/30/03 at 06:37 AM

Deliciously Morning!

Posted by Trisha De Gracia on 11/30/03 at 07:17 AM

This is so beautiful. You manage to use some awesome imagry in a way that's totally understandable. You take something so ordinary and turn it into a work of art. This is stunning.

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