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fathom
by Ginette T Bellei wish i could trust you
but the indigio sky is too weak
to carry the heavy, liquid-filled clouds
separating the earth beneath us
from the steaming chai heavens
too mystical i am
sitting right there with them
on candle lit, red silk patios
and chocolate raspberry desserts
the ring
there waiting to be eaten
loyal...eternity fixed on a cashmere pillow
11/16/2003 Posted on 11/17/2003
Copyright © 2024 Ginette T Belle
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Leslie Ann Eisenberg on 11/17/03 at 05:34 AM beautiful. loyal...eternity fixed on a cashmere pillow
is a very powerful last line. leave it at that. it's perfect.
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| Posted by Quinlan L Gibson on 11/18/03 at 02:40 PM Well, i think Hugh has a good grasp on this piece!
I think it's wonderful, a great display of distrust no matter the reason. |
| Posted by Max Bouillet on 11/19/03 at 07:59 PM Highly effective imagery that paints a superb backdrop for these words of wisdom. Great read. |
| Posted by Siri Lipscomb on 11/20/03 at 11:21 PM Trust is such an elusive thing. But you can trust your inner voices, because they seem to be right on. Are you listening to them? Oh, and I agree with James about the 4th line edit suggestion. |
| Posted by Charles E Minshall on 11/21/03 at 10:05 PM Nice poem Ginette. I agree the last, "I just
wish I could trust you" could be left out...Charlie |
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