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by Ginette T Belle

i wish i could trust you
but the indigio sky is too weak
to carry the heavy, liquid-filled clouds
separating the earth beneath us
from the steaming chai heavens

too mystical i am
sitting right there with them
on candle lit, red silk patios
and chocolate raspberry desserts

the ring
there waiting to be eaten
loyal...eternity fixed on a cashmere pillow

11/16/2003

Posted on 11/17/2003
Copyright © 2019 Ginette T Belle

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Leslie Ann Eisenberg on 11/17/03 at 05:34 AM

beautiful. loyal...eternity fixed on a cashmere pillow is a very powerful last line. leave it at that. it's perfect.

Posted by Quinlan L Gibson on 11/18/03 at 02:40 PM

Well, i think Hugh has a good grasp on this piece! I think it's wonderful, a great display of distrust no matter the reason.

Posted by Max Bouillet on 11/19/03 at 07:59 PM

Highly effective imagery that paints a superb backdrop for these words of wisdom. Great read.

Posted by Siri Lipscomb on 11/20/03 at 11:21 PM

Trust is such an elusive thing. But you can trust your inner voices, because they seem to be right on. Are you listening to them? Oh, and I agree with James about the 4th line edit suggestion.

Posted by Charles E Minshall on 11/21/03 at 10:05 PM

Nice poem Ginette. I agree the last, "I just wish I could trust you" could be left out...Charlie

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