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Pieced together for a picnic (Poetry Clinic Exercise)
by Cathlyn Cartier
Lick the blueberry colored thread
Pass it through the eye of the needle
Hear the buzzing voice of machinery,
as mother adds a splash of orange
to the patchwork she's piecing.
The finished project, a conglomeration...parts and pieces of family history,
packed carefully into a basket
Spread across the soil at cliff's edge.
Watching the clouds waltzing past...
an evening's repast in nature.
10/28/2003 Author's Note: This was written in about 5 minutes. Part of the requirements were to use the words cliff, needle, voice, buzz, soil, cloud, orange, mother, lick and blueberry(in any form) in a 10 line poem. The line spacing is kind of whacked, and I don't know how to fix it, and this isn't at all a polished work, but it was great fun!
Posted on 10/28/2003
Copyright © 2024 Cathlyn Cartier
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Max Bouillet on 10/28/03 at 11:03 PM The form could be altered a little bit... but the images are incedible. Really really good for a five minute effort! |
| Posted by Cole Miller on 10/28/03 at 11:20 PM heh way to go, im still working on my piece for this exercise. |
| Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 10/29/03 at 03:00 AM Wow! five minutes! Great writing!
May I suggest that you eliminate, "The finished product, a conglomeration" That is suggested in the line above and in the ending of the line it is a part of. The lines will then be balanced in length. Great reading! |
| Posted by Quinlan L Gibson on 10/29/03 at 01:44 PM Fun well done Cathlyn |
| Posted by Ashok Sharda on 10/29/03 at 05:25 PM This is a poem. gathering the scattered pieces together and assembling a creative piece, despite the time stipulation. Well done is what I want to say. |
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