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topic: caught in the wake of your redshift

by Rachelle Howe

i never knew that missing someone
could make you hurt this much. no,

not like this.
i'm staggering as i wash through the
waves of your sanguine lethe,
bewildered as michael rows my boat ashore...

i'm adrift, upon this solitary bone,
the water saltier than i remembered
as it invades the sunset wounds.

in the backlit sky's oblivion,
i'm caught in the wake of your redshift;
melted into the silhouette patterns
from a sunken once-was. and i am
floundering, coughing, spitting

up the names of all the old prophets, and
today, in the mirrored dusk, i'm haunted by
what we could have been.

10/10/2003

Author's Note: by the wonderful, glorious don coffman! :) record speed, i say! hehehehe.

Posted on 10/10/2003
Copyright © 2024 Rachelle Howe

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Jason Wardell on 10/10/03 at 08:55 AM

that was fast. you do wonders with these topic poems, i'm always amazed :) haunting.

Posted by Don Coffman on 10/10/03 at 09:03 AM

*whistles* A record composition time, indeed. You win the award for quickest poetry wits methinks. And you've done an excellent job with this, it's wonderful!

Posted by Trisha De Gracia on 10/11/03 at 07:15 PM

Um hi, uh, my name's Trish, and I just wanted to say that I LOVE this and every one of your poems. :D:D:D Darling this line right here "in the backlit sky's oblivion, i'm caught in the wake of your redshift;" caught me offguard. Brilliant ;)

Posted by Mainon A Schwartz on 10/14/03 at 03:19 AM

"spitting / up all the names of the old prophets"-- perfect and profound. I might tweak the spelling of silhouette a little, but you know my anal editing tendencies. ;-) But then, you also know I think this poem rocks-- as do you. Brava.

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