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Topic: You Only Think We Like You
by Kristine BrieseHaving unbuckled myself
from the truth in your smile,
having wrapped myself up
in the warmth of your guile,
I twirl and dance
in a bone-chilling rain
that fails to change my
self-serving refrain.
With each molecule basking
in a counterfeit affection,
with my lifes blood gaily flowing
(although in the wrong direction),
I write a saccharine poem that
I hope you will adore,
I voice a sappy melody
to make you love me more.
But on a frosty morning
with my thoughts in disarray,
although my optimism
keeps my heart free of dismay,
I look into your eyes and find,
despite my self-deception,
your sweet and boundless love has been
a sham from its inception!
09/25/2003 Author's Note: Topic as suggested by Rachelle Howe.
Posted on 09/25/2003
Copyright © 2026 Kristine Briese
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Max Bouillet on 09/25/03 at 06:55 PM This is a very articulate view on self-deception and the way it works within the human mind. Great emotional snapshot that gets and keeps the reader thinking. Extremely well done. |
| Posted by Rachelle Howe on 09/25/03 at 08:01 PM well met, darling girl! I hate rhyme, as i've said a thousand times, but you pulled it off in style. ;) and you said your muse was buried beneath my floorboards... ha! |
| Posted by David R Spellman on 09/26/03 at 03:42 PM Great flow and and a well presented realization; though sad, still quite a bit whimsical. |
| Posted by Christopher Shin on 09/26/03 at 10:44 PM Very powerfully written about betrayal in the eyes. Well i might be a little bitter hee hee. |
| Posted by Ashok Sharda on 09/28/03 at 04:49 PM Its a realization. This piece is bound to internalize it.we are all so used to self deception and false justification. To out disadvantage, knowingly. Ignoring the KNOWING. Knowing the knowing when its too late. |
| Posted by Aaron Blair on 10/01/03 at 12:33 AM You get my first comment. Which is, I love this poem. Not terribly original, I know. But still. |
| Posted by Rachelle Howe on 10/05/03 at 02:20 AM how have i *NOT COMMENTED ON THIS!?* oh my god, honey, this topic was all yours, and man, you've smacked me with it. |
| Posted by Ginette T Belle on 10/17/03 at 03:22 PM i love it dear...this ryhming is just beautiful...flows wonderfully... |
| Posted by Susan Q Tomas on 01/19/04 at 09:54 PM
Very well articulated realization. Beautiful. I also like how you like yourself in the poem and don't let the "counterfeit affection" get you down. |
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