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topic: stagnant waters
by Rachelle Howemy walls caved in today.
i found myself naked,
eyes roaming, your fingers
searching the braille of my skin.
the goosebumps rose, and i
heard your ragged intake as we
delved into the vices of flesh.
my ankles, first, then torso,
finally, all of me had been submerged
beneath the stagnant waters.
i floundered, there, content to float,
content to breathe in the essence of you, of us...
but when i started to lose the very thing that
makes me human
(as i turned over my soul to lesser gods)
i realized the world was slipping, and all was fading to black.
you're quicksand, you see,
and easily i'm entrapped.
i would go willingly, that lamb to the slaughter,
if it weren't for the other ties that bind.
but i'm unable to make a choice,
unable to live with the knowledge
that i saw you there, gasping for redemption...
watching, immobilized, unrelenting,
while you drowned.
08/30/2003 Author's Note: inspired by kim. thank you, always.
Posted on 08/30/2003
Copyright © 2024 Rachelle Howe
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Amanda L Marron on 09/02/03 at 03:21 PM wonderful write.......i know the feeling |
| Posted by Kristine Briese on 09/02/03 at 05:10 PM This is exquisite. The imagery, the choice of words...flawless. |
| Posted by Mainon A Schwartz on 09/05/03 at 10:40 PM The attribution of divinity to quicksand is a startling one, but nevertheless effective and compelling. The first stanza is my favorite... and I hope you don't mind my saying so, but I thought the "do the right thing" line brought too much of the mundane/prosaic into what is otherwise a beautiful, other-worldly-feeling poem. |
| Posted by Christel Crews on 09/07/03 at 05:57 PM this is wonderful, a beautiful piece. thank you |
| Posted by Quinlan L Gibson on 10/30/03 at 03:09 PM "that lamb to the slaughter" what a beautiful comparison in this piece. Perfectly said. |
| Posted by Leslie Ann Eisenberg on 03/24/04 at 04:50 PM beautiful, darling. |
| Posted by Ginette T Belle on 03/26/04 at 03:36 PM lovely... |
| Posted by Laura Doom on 04/18/04 at 10:45 AM So, I've finally read this ubiquitous piece...now I can appreciate why, and why :) |
| Posted by Beth K Hannah on 04/20/04 at 03:00 AM wow...this cut something deep. Wonderful. |
| Posted by Betania Tesch on 10/08/04 at 06:52 PM you're too damn talented for this world. |
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