as long as you're still breathing
by Olivia Weinkein
i'm beginning to find myself
within the rise and fall of your chest.
everytime you inhale i fall in love.
and everytime you exhale i fall in love
Posted on 08/16/2003
Copyright © 2023 Olivia Weinkein
|Member Comments on this Poem|
|Posted by Erin Werle on 08/17/03 at 12:25 AM|
This is astounding. So emotive, and not-drawn-out. The simplicity itself makes it gorgeous, and the wording simply multiplies everything.
|Posted by Jolie Jordan on 08/20/03 at 10:09 PM|
Ah.. this is nice. I like it. short, sweet, and all that good stuff.
|Posted by Michele Schottelkorb on 03/25/04 at 09:13 AM|
within the rise and fall of your chest."... this line is beautiful... congrats on POTD... blessings...
|Posted by Michelle Angelini on 07/02/05 at 11:49 PM|
Olivia, the simple intensity awakes my imagination so that I can put myself in the narrator's place. Breathe to live; breathe to love - a trip where nothing exists but the two of "us."