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Angelic Barfly

by Max Bouillet

Lopsided light
glints off smudged mirrors
and tinted bottles
into bloodshot eyes
licked by smoke
and dulled by whiskey
to reveal
an angel tinged in shadow
with succubus lips
stumbling towards me.

Breathless for passion
she slips sumptuously
on the stool,
slurs incomprehensibly at me
and waits for me to praise her.

But upon opening my mouth,
I become
thick
dumb-tongued
and I swallow
my own feet
'til they pop out my arse
and I shuffle about
kicking myself
in muffled silence
until she leaves
slumped in the arms
of another.

07/25/2003

Author's Note: I really don't know.

Posted on 07/25/2003
Copyright © 2020 Max Bouillet

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Anne Engelen on 07/26/03 at 04:44 AM

quite a scene you painted here. Excellent!

Posted by JD Clay on 07/26/03 at 02:02 PM

I think I know her, I dated her sister from Alamogordo. Good stuff, my friend. Peace...

Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 07/26/03 at 03:57 PM

You lucked out! LOL! The contradictory title is very clever (Angelic Barfly???) Congratulations on Top Ten!

Posted by Lori I Wolfe on 07/26/03 at 11:20 PM

A lady would have tried to pull that foot out of his mouth ...*grins* great poem!

Posted by Rommel Cruz on 07/27/03 at 03:37 PM

hahaha

Posted by Vimal Rony on 07/27/03 at 07:55 PM

Very intriguing title and the poem fits it like a glove.A different and refreshing poetry.

Posted by Charles E Minshall on 07/28/03 at 06:30 PM

Fun poem to read Max....Charlie

Posted by Rachelle Howe on 07/28/03 at 10:21 PM

tales such as these happen *too* often to me. :) ROFL very nicely put!

Posted by Amanda J Cobb on 07/30/03 at 01:21 AM

"An angel tinged in shadow." Wonderful line. The imagery in this is so vivid. Great work.

Posted by Don Coffman on 08/24/03 at 07:41 AM

The ending is quite amusingly done, and the rest is as vivid as a picture. I loved it.

Posted by Alison McKenzie on 01/04/04 at 03:19 AM

This is amazingly wonderful!!! LOL, it definitely made me laugh to imagine it! Thank you!

Posted by Michele Schottelkorb on 01/06/04 at 06:45 AM

max, if i ever read a piece by you that i don't adore, i shall have MY feet kicking MY arse in disbelief... very cheeky poem here... i love it... blessings...

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