The Day My Dream Didn't Come Home
by Christel Crews
The day my dream didn't come home
I sent it out in a prayer for you
But you didn't return it
How sad, how true
Now it is gone
What will I do?
Author's Note: I was thinking on the lines of a children's poem... short, sweet, to the point... but i'm not really good at this short poem thing. does it need anything? tell me the honest truth!!!
Posted on 07/06/2003
Copyright © 2022 Christel Crews
|Member Comments on this Poem|
|Posted by Kate Demeree on 07/10/03 at 01:08 AM|
I think it is a great short poem! It is to the point... literally and figurativly. Well Done!
|Posted by Ginette T Belle on 04/01/04 at 03:32 AM|
love the title...unique thought...
|Posted by Jean Mollett on 05/10/04 at 04:59 AM|
Good one, keep on writing them. It's good, wouldn't change a thing. :)
|Posted by Tim D Livingston on 08/06/04 at 12:36 PM|
Hey great job. You nailed it.
|Posted by Michelle Angelini on 08/31/06 at 12:29 AM|
Christel, I love this. It's almost a shape poem, like a top. All's you'd have to do to make it one is rearrange the last couple of lines to come to a point. Kids love tops, at least I used to when I was young. And kids (even big kids) dream...