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Standing in Flames Ver. 1.5
by Ryan M EvonSearching for a word stronger then
ache. I know right where to use it. Pulling
at my hair curls let loose and fall. Locked
in my room, to protect the world from
the me, that I dont want to be. Driven
deep in so far past irritation to the point
where my own reflection angers.
Grinding teeth has become habit, involuntary
result of rage. Unjust explosions into
anyone, anything, that comes too close. Just
stay away, there is no one here you want to
know. Body is on fire and Im stranded in
the middle of a volatile gasoline sea.
Raging beyond anything that defines
rage by any means. Over the edge and
turning back requires time travel or god-like
redemption. Knots in my gut, needles in my
chest, and lava in my head. Waiting for a miracle
cure, my savior, someone, something, to save me.
I havent the power to save myself.
04/18/2003 Author's Note: Slight re-write and re-order of the original. Please tell me what you think.
Posted on 04/18/2003
Copyright © 2025 Ryan M Evon
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Amanda J Cobb on 05/12/03 at 02:23 AM Wow, this has great potential. Some very powerful lines in here: "stay away, there is no one here you want to know" and "turning back requires time travel or god-like redemption" are especially striking. I like it, and don't really have much advice except to check your comma use (oh, and you want than, not then, in the first line). Keep up the good work! |
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