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Waterfall - ing
by Graeme FieldenWhite cloud drifts slowly over frozen fields
Frozen door-mouse, sleeps soundly in his nest
Hibernates beneath the earth
Cracks and shivers with winters harsh touch
White cloud drifts slowly over frozen fields
Over mountains, snow peaked caps
Frozen creeks drip slowly
Downward, through warmed progression
White cloud drifts slowly over frozen fields
Drip, drip, drip, ice melts fast below
Creek builds, flows progressive,
Excessive gush of water starts a river
White cloud drifts slowly over frozen fields
Starts a torrent, gravitational movement
Downwards pushes heavily, easily
Pans into the delta, seeking falling waters
White cloud drifts slowly over frozen fields
Staring down beneath
Waters pound, sound, sound
Thunder beats into the valley with a steady roar
04/11/2003 Posted on 04/11/2003
Copyright © 2024 Graeme Fielden
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Christina Bruno on 04/11/03 at 12:42 PM the scene you paint is very ethereal |
| Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 04/14/03 at 01:35 PM Effective use of repitition of the first line for each stanza. Catch the feel of the cold, the melt, almost hear the rushing waters. Stirs images of flowing water, of rivulets to streams to rivers to ocean's depths. |
| Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 05/22/03 at 07:45 PM I have just read this again and it reminds me of views of the snowcapped mountains especially in Switzerland with the water rushing down the mountain side into rivers below. Quite descriptive poetry. |
| Posted by Beth K Hannah on 05/26/03 at 04:28 PM lovely, the imagery is fascinating |
| Posted by Michele Schottelkorb on 07/01/04 at 01:16 PM this is gorgeous and beautiful and real... what a perfect nature poem!!!... and you wrote of the door-mouse!... this has a beautiful quiet sincerity about it... drifting slowly... awesome piece... blessings... |
| Posted by Max Bouillet on 02/03/05 at 02:00 PM Omnipresence and indifference of the rain as it hovers over the frozen landscape. Great read with plenty to think about. |
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