I recommend deleting the repetition of "to remember" that occurs in the beginning of the third line, and the word, "and" that immediately follows. "She had saw" is grammatically incorrect. You either say, "She saw" or "She had seen". Also, what caused her to see her future flash before her eyes? This line feels melodramatic as it stands. I like where you're trying to go with this, it just needs a little work. I hope I've helped. :)